Testimonials - Manuscript Critiquing and Story Coaching


"Susan Hughes has critiqued three of my picture book stories in the past year. With her comments in mind, I did my revisions and sold all three! Susan's insightful comments help bring a project closer to acceptance. In the competitive world of children's book publishing, one needs such incisive assistance." 

- Monica Kulling, author of many picture books, such as Spic-and-Span: Lillian Galbrieth's Wonder Kitchen (Tundra) and Mister Dash and the Cupcake Calamity (Tundra); Toronto, ON, Canada


"I just went over your evaluation comments on my picture book manuscript, and all I have to say is WOW. You are amazing! Thank you for being so thorough. Your comments were insightful, and I loved that you offered suggestions." 
- Elaheh Bos, writer and illustrator of children's books; Montreal, QC, Canada


"As a first-time children's book author, I feel incredibly fortunate for Susan's help. Susan critiqued my first picture book, "What's Wrong with Sunny?" and worked with me as a writing coach, providing excellent insights to help tighten up the manuscript." 
Amitha Kalaichandran, author of "What's Wrong with Sunny?" (Archway, 2016), Toronto, Ontario


"Susan presented a comprehensive critique of my 760 word narrative nonfiction picture book. She examined my writing in line-by-line detail. I especially appreciated her skill at getting into the head of my potential readers (7 to 11 year olds). She gave such helpful suggestions for simplifying a complicated true story for the young reader. Thank you, Susan! You’ll be hearing from me again." 
- Sarah Glenn Fortson, retired teacher and energetic author of children’s stories; Chicago, Illinois, US


"I appreciate the feedback you provided on my picture book manuscript.  I had to let go of the original story ideas for my characters to get to the one that would work. From your words, something stirred inside me.... Sitting with your feedback and direction I was able to let go and create a brand new story." 
- Sarah L. Roberts, Sacramento, California, US


"Susan was a fresh pair of eyes for my chapter book manuscript. She was able to help me flesh out the characters that I loved, and help the reader to love them too. Her feedback was clear, concise and very helpful." 
- Melanie Mosher, children's writer and author of "Fire Pie Trout", "Fifth House" (2014); eastern shore of Nova Scotia, Canada


"I just wanted to thank you again for the evaluation of my middle grade manuscript! You did such a great job and provided me with such helpful feedback that I have been able to revisit the manuscript in a more meaningful way. I've been able to "clean up" some of the elements that were confusing and unclear, and layer the text to bring in some key pieces earlier on in the story. Your comments also helped me to really think about my main character Evie and what her actions said about her, something that was really needed. I'm really excited about the changes it has brought about in the story!" 
- Samantha Desjardins, Ottawa, ON, Canada


"I recently reached out to Susan for help with a middle grade novel. I had lost direction with it and was stuck going forward. Her detailed, insightful and knowledgeable evaluation provided me with the direction I need to jump back into the project with invigorated gusto. Not only has Susan provided me with a road-map of how I can turn this project into a publisher-ready manuscript, but she also gave me the encouragement I need to become re-inspired. Thank you Susan." 
- Michelle Kadarusman, contributor to Chirp and chickaDEE magazines and author of "Out of It" ( Lorimer, 2014); Toronto, ON, Canada


"Susan Hughes is a very supportive and encouraging writing coach. She is honest, thoughtful, and has a wealth of information on writing. With every draft I felt she read my middle grade manuscript The King of Average closely and carefully before offering any critique or suggestion. She is never critical without being constructive. Her gentle nudges over the year were not pushy or scolding, but kept me motivated. I'm glad she kept in touch with me until I got to my final draft. I've got a better manuscript than I ever could have done on my own. I recommend her wholeheartedly without reservation." 
- Gary Schwartz, author of "The King of Average" (Bookstrope, 2015), North Bend, Washington, US


"The embarrassing truth is that your first draft is rarely as perfect as you imagine it is. Susan's insightful questions and suggestions were invaluable in making Loose Strands and its characters come alive. Her manuscript evaluation and substantive edit made sure we were hitting the right notes for our middle grade audience. She was professional, flexible (especially important with our interactive middle grade adventure novel app, since the interactivity meant working through some non-traditional narrative structures) and willing to talk through anything that needed reworking." 
- Mark Moyes, author and developer of Loose Strands, an interactive adventure novel app; winner of Best Children's App at the 2015 Digital Book Awards; Toronto, ON, Canada


"Susan Hughes did a tremendous job editing my YA manuscript Robi's Flying Saucer Drive-In ...." 
- Kelly Winsa, "Robi's Flying Saucer Drive-In (Kobo, 2015)" Big Island of Hawaii, US, and Stoney Lake, ON, Canada


"Susan's insights helped me strengthen my YA manuscript by getting inside the emotional journey of my character. Her unerring ability to identify just what's needed and exactly where to focus gave me a huge boost in polishing my manuscript for submission. And she's just plain fun to work with!" 
- Pat Bourke, author of "Yesterday's Dead" (Second Story, 2012); Victoria, BC, Canada


"Susan did such an amazing job evaluating and editing the first draft of my young adult manuscript! Not only did she assist me in strengthening the manuscript itself, but she went above and beyond to help me. I will definitely work with Susan again." 
- Jamie McPherson, Coquitlam, BC, Canada


"In her thorough critique of our children's story in verse form, Susan shone light on parts of the writing that were confusing and she pressed for clarification. She provided feedback which helped us see our work in a shape that made sense. We are very grateful for Susan's time and the attention she gave our story." 
- Martha Jarrell, writer, and Mary Christie Chalk, watercolor painter, ON, Canada


"When I contacted Susan, I wasn't totally sure what I wanted or what I needed. I just knew I needed help with the draft of my first novel for adults! Susan put together a custom package for me, because it turned out I needed a little of everything. The publisher loved Susan's edits, and I ended up adopting most of them. I will use Susan in the future, for my sequel to this novel and other manuscript edits." 
- Holly Smith, author of "Culmination" (Mason Marshall Press, 2016), Oregon, US


"Susan's in-depth analysis of my adult sci-fi police thriller has been a valuable learning experience for me as a novelist and a marvelous pathway to a tighter and more comprehensive presentation of my story. While she was careful not to tell me how to write my manuscript, she gave a very thorough, objective evaluation of the work, showing me what was working, what wasn't, and offering suggestions for making changes. Her comments let me see where my story grabbed the readers and, equally important, where I risked losing them. She was able to define how essential each character was to the overall plot. She understood where I was heading with my work and helped to clear the obstacles from that arduous path." 
James Durrah, New York, NY, US


"As a new author with an adult fantasy fiction manuscript, I was pleased with how Susan was able to illuminate a path for improvement for me. She helped me realize my weaknesses by providing insightful comments and offering individual character assessments. She suggested tips for building my new world which is so vital to a good fantasy. She helped my story sound more real and believable overall. I had been blind before. With Susan's help, I am now able to see what I need to do to get my manuscript published." 
- Hasan Muzaffer, author of "Blood Secrets" and adult/young adult fantasy writer; Bluefield, Virginia, US


"While searching for an editor to do a copy-edit of my short story collection for adults, Welcome Distraction, I was fortunate enough to find Susan. Her mark-up of the manuscript was thorough, prompt, and done at a fair price. It was a positive experience all around." 
Michael Wilde, author of "Welcome Distraction" (2013); Toronto, ON, Canada